Sleeping Valor

I am horrible at critiquing poetry because there really are no rules to poetry. BUT, since I read it, I am compelled to say something. I liked this poem, for ...

I think I saw 1 grammar error that I meant to point out, but it was supper time so now I have no clue where it went. =P This is ...

o.O The title got my attention, the unbroken mass of text made my eyes go crossed. >.< If you could break the text up a bit more, then I could ...

Have you ever listened to your heart thump against your chest at night, when no one is around to hear it? The pulse is outstandingly rhythmic to listen to. I ...

She pretends that she is fine As she pulls on her mask That hides her heart from the world I think you should change it to either 'As she pulls ...

:smt043 And here I was, going to bookmark some of Jabber's work so I could give her a nice critique when I ran out of homework... lol! A little confusing ...

Okay. Seminar due tomorrow, still haven't started. Essay due friday, also unstarted. Report to write in class, research unlook at. Hmms. I shall just give you a nice little 'characterization' ...

^_^ Prepare yourself for questions, it's how I seem to comment these days. Scared ,[add comma] I run as fast as I can. I another shot rang off in the ...

Edit: BBB beat me to it! Sorry if I repeat anything. Welcome to YWS! ^_^ Before I get started, I should wanr you there is a 2:1 rule. For every ...

I read this in class last year, or the year before. I didn't find It amazing, but it was an interesting read. The irony, of course, is that if it ...

^_^ I adored these books. But I won't lie, I liked Edward less in the third one. =P I read the first one in a day (while on a tour ...

It was eight ‘o’ clock. [I think it's actually "eight o'clock"] Tally sat in her room with the window slightly open. The breeze was rustling the pages of her magazine. ...

Well so much for being helpful. This is beautiful. My wispy limbs reach outward in longing: I hunger. I might replace that colon with a semi colon, since you're not ...

Not sure if this should have capitals at the beginning of new lines, so I won't say it should. Your last line "This is how much I love you so" ...

The emotion is so deep, I start to breathe more heavily, It takes forever to slow down After I've started getting angry. This is the only stanza (methinks that's the ...